Interesting how language shifts - the story is third-person from Alexander's POV, and he is concise, precise, sparse, correct in his language. But Katrina's an empath - and when her emotions are spilling over onto him, the writing shifts; the sentences are longer, swirling, not as controlled. Had not noticed that when I was writing it.
Altogether, I don't think I have to add much. There are a few awkward sentences, and some words I repeat overmuch... one continuity error, and one scene that needs to be moved up a bit. Otherwise, I do rather like it. That's a relief!
Next step, after fixing those things? Sending it to some beta readers to see if it makes sense and hangs together the way I want it to. Because the biggest problem I have here is that I know this whole story intimately, and therefore I could be flat-out forgetting to communicate things to you, the people outside my head.