I need time to let the reader care about the relationship here. And I'm struggling with how to do that in a reasonable length. This is a novel-length story, these two, and I am trying to hypercompress it and keep everything as it should be. I need to give Telenias time to open up. I need to give the reader time to see that Katrina's not a petulant child, she's just scared and adrift in a foreign place, clinging to the one person who's been good to her.
My short stories thus far have been snapshots, hyperilluminations of a moment or few moments. "Fortune" is one night, one conversation. "Valentines" is broader, but it's still really about the fallout of one event; same with "The Angel of Fremont Street".
Fun with new skillsets.
Telling stories of love and loss and duty and breakdowns in < 5,000 words is hard. Let's go shopping.